Sascha Frost - Don't Go Quietly (original, rough)

Here we go ... first full song I've ever done with lyrics. Don't be too hard on me, I'm still new at creating melodies for vocals. Let me know what you think :) This is kind of a softer song ... any suggestions/comments would be appreciated!

Lyrics:

Don't speak lightly
These things are important to them
Don't talk softly
'Cos quiet is not the new loud
And everything you want to say turns to ashes in your mouth
When you think about it too much

And most of what I want to say is things that can never be said
And most of what I tried to say couldn't be easily read

You don't see clearly
And clearly there's something missing
You don't live proudly
Own up to mistakes that aren't yours
Your life is pulling you in all directions and it's pulling you apart
This doesn't feel much like living

You wished me on over to you,
but I couldn't make your wish come true
I wish I would have tried to do what I thought that you wanted me to
But it all just fell away like I expected it to

I try to keep telling myself that everything will be just fine
I try to keep telling myself that I have plenty of time